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Off He Goes (FFT)
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Posted: 17th January 2005 10:33
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Taking a little break from fanficking, I decided to write an ode about Ramza in first-person point of view. Enjoy or something.
----------- Coping in silence on the morn My father made his wishes known. Ever since I was born I've lived my pledge to him. Standing silent in northern fort My friend made his feelings felt. Cradling his dead sister's corpse I sent my prayers to him. Deserting at the waterfall My comrade cast us aside. Deaf to his beck and call I veered my path from his. Losing a sister in the underground I knew what Delita long ago. It wasn't about breaking down I took the chance to grow. Fighting in my homeland My brother here and gone at once. Striking with my own two hands I laid my flesh and blood to rest. Ship of fate deep in the earth Choices made all for naught, Planks of wood give way to air Finding faith in what I've got. Disappearing, but not to hide My sister and I are sweeping past River run and countryside We'll find our home at last. ----------------------------------------- -------------------- It's gonna be a glorious day I feel my luck can change |
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Posted: 17th January 2005 13:17
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I dig it. The last stanza is the best of them all. Made me remember Ramza and Alma, riding through the woods and stopping at the river for their chocobos.
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Posted: 17th January 2005 14:08
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Yeah, the last line is my fave too. It's very Hobbitish, I'd say. =p
-------------------- It's gonna be a glorious day I feel my luck can change |
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Posted: 17th January 2005 16:20
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I'm confused with one part (Note: I have only played FFT through the first two battles. Not my type of game. So, I don't know the plot.)
"Losing a sister in the underground I knew what Delita long ago." I think you're missing a word here. Knew what Delita *what* long ago? Felt, saw, did, heard, wished, sought? Otherwise, I like it. Plus Hamedo confirms that it makes sense in the FFT world, since he didn't post saying that it did not. Please get back to me (in this thread) about that one line. -------------------- I had an old signature. Now I've changed it. |
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Posted: 17th January 2005 18:27
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Elena-
It fits perfectly within the realm of FFT.  -------------------- Join the Army, see the world, meet interesting people - and kill them. ~Pacifist Badge, 1978 |
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Post #70019
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Posted: 17th January 2005 19:29
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Yeah, I messed around with those two lines and I must have edited a word out. It's supposed to be 'felt' in there.
-------------------- It's gonna be a glorious day I feel my luck can change |
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Post #70024
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Posted: 19th January 2005 03:07
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I just read this. Wow. Thats Awesome! I rarely remove my hat but what the hell-
Hats off to you! (tips hat) -------------------- If you've been mod-o-fied, It's an illusion, and you're in-between. Don't you be tarot-fied, It's just alot of nothing, so what can it mean? ~Frank Zappa Sins exist only for people who are on the Way or approaching the Way |
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