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Quote (Zephir @ 28th June 2004 04:29)

I especially like Echoes of Armageddon for a title.

Good one! After all, the army IS an echo of another time where Armageddon was near...

Who else likes that one? Because I think it may be the name...

A few more edits done to the prologue. Its a little longer now.

This post has been edited by Del S on 28th June 2004 21:16

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"Only the dead have seen the end of their quotes being misattributed to Plato."
-George Santayana

"The world will little note, nor long remember what we say here..."
-Abraham Lincoln, prior to the discovery of Irony.

I like that rewrite even better. XO

Though, I think it'd look better in an edit box instead of a spoiler, 'cause it really hurts my eyes reading that much highlighted text at once...

Edit

Wow, post 825... what a coincidence, eh? ^^;

This post has been edited by Zephir on 29th June 2004 06:33

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~Status Report~

* Completed... Dragon's Head
* Completed... Soldiers of the Empire: Disciples (release pending)
* In Progress/Undecided... Of Love and Betrayal
* Planning/Assembly... Where it all Began

I like the idea of the secret society you started depicting : it leaves a whole lot of room for later adjonctions. There's some mispelling, but nothing really important at this stage of the writing.

Possible spoilers: highlight to view

However, I feel that you should refrain from refering to the 'ancient power revived' part in the prologue : speaking about one myth is okay, but then people will be waiting for the underground frozen army to awake in every posting. If you keep it under you sleeve (being told later at a critical moment by some sage of great lore or something...), it will have more impact, I think. And it leaves room to later writers as to wether or not they want to develop this side of the story, or let it be told by others

I can't wait to see the final prologue aired, and the whole thing started : only Kara and NP before me...

This post has been edited by Mr Thou on 29th June 2004 10:01