Posted: 14th November 2002 03:53
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Okay, I talked with Josh bout this and he said as long as I put a disclaimer first, it'd be okay to post this story. Still, I'm gonna be a lil more cautious and simply create a link to the story instead of directly posting it. So here it is.
This is an erotic fanfiction and contains strong sexual content and language and themes that may easily offend. As of now, it's still 'R' rated, but I may or may not take it further (I'm still writing it). http://www.expression.edu/~npolenske/written_work/locke.htm -------------------- |
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Post #4886
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Posted: 14th November 2002 17:34
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You already know my thoughts on the majority of what you have, and the latest addition is also quite good. Can't wait to see the next bit.
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Post #4899
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Posted: 16th November 2002 04:36
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I've added a few more 'chapters' to the story. It's the same link, so just click on the one shown above. I really would like comments for this story, cause I this is the first one where I've tried to tackle something I'm not all that familiar with. Not sex so much, but a relationship in general. I'd like to know if it seems compelling and realistic or just silly and naive.
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Post #4975
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Posted: 16th November 2002 16:05
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It was really a surprise when I first read it, but it's really good. I just had to keep my eyes from popping out of their sockets when Celes came in with that bowl...
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Post #4996
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Posted: 16th November 2002 16:22
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Palace Guard Posts: 2,591 Joined: 17/1/2001 Awards: |
You know I love this fic NP ^-^ I'll be sure to look at it for updates. I don't think it's naive though, aside from certain, umm, scenes, it feels like realistic relationship. Actually, the scenes may be realistic too for some people. You're doing fine.
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Post #5002
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Posted: 23rd November 2002 10:13
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Added some more chapters. Another sex romp in this update and something very important to the story. Hope you enjoy.
Okay, so this ones got another extreme scene, but I think now that I'm gonna keep it down to R rated content (at least I feel it's only R material, I've read much worse in Stephen King novels at any rate). Actually the reason I'm doing this is simply because what I've written doesn't warrant anything worse and I'm gonna finish the fic before I put in anything else that would. I know that it's going to be ending either way, which makes me immensely happy. I can't stand it when I start a fic that doesn't want to end... *couchedgarandsabincough* -------------------- |
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Post #5250
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Posted: 23rd November 2002 16:25
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Palace Guard Posts: 2,591 Joined: 17/1/2001 Awards: |
Even though you had told me beforehand some of what happens in this last part, I still really enjoyed it ^-^ And I can tell from reading that you're getting really into the writing, it gets better with the more you add.
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Post #5253
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Posted: 11th January 2003 00:50
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Great malarky, the last time I wrote on this, it was November of last year! It's becoming a really bad habbit for me to take long pauses when I write. Ironically enough, when I finally started writing again, I was able to breeze through the thing like it was no one's business, whereas that same spot in the story had me banging my head against the desk when I stopped.
Anyscrew, I updated the link for another chapter. I'm still a bit troubled about how to end it cause something happens. Okay, let's just say I'm not quite ready to write that part so it may be a long time before this thing ends. Until then, I hope you like the new chapter. -------------------- |
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Post #6855
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Posted: 22nd January 2003 05:43
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Disciplinary Committee Member Posts: 689 Joined: 27/6/2001 Awards: |
Vweee...long, but I like it. But like Neal, I was kinda...uh...freaked out with that bowl thing...
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